When I stand before you
Alone in our alone-ness
I suffer a sensory overload
Your eyes drown my thoughts
Your voice entices my being
Your lips make me yearn
Your hands make me yield
What I hold dear
My sanity, becomes insane
In that moment,
who I am, is forgotten
My mind's map becomes invisible
My voice is lost in silence
A part of me is torn
Between wanting to be Me
And melding with you, in one-ness .
Holding on to the tiny sliver of sanity
I turn my back and walk away.
When the distance blurs you
From my sight,
I sit down and pour what I feel,
On to parchments, of verse, prose or imaginings.
20 comments:
It reminds me a bit of Rumi, it has that Sufi, ecstatic feel to it. I especially like the "my sanity becomes insane"
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Ah! you read Rumi too. I was aiming for the Mirabai feel though, unlike her, I love my illusory sanity more :).
this writing was 'savory'...and I feasted!
nice to have you here this week, Rashi
thanks for dropping by!
Doesn't everybody? lol I'm not familiar with Mirabai, however. I will have to look her up.
I think here, in the US, it is required reading. Most other places it is a matter of interest. Mirabai was Hindu Mystic from India who wrote beautiful "devotional" poetry, mostly addressed to Lord Krishna, an incarnation of Vishnu, the Hindu God of Preservation.
Glad you enjoyed it Callie. :)
Rumi has a very strong contemporary advocate in English in Coleman Barks, and you must admit, Rumi the man was a very strong personality. From what little I know about him, he impresses me with his practicality on the one hand, and his mysticism on the other, and I am not a mystic by inclination. Not that I want to take away anything from Mirabai or any other such poet. I have found a few of her poems online now. Thanks for the stimulus to seek her out.
this has many facets like any pretty jewel :) loved it
You are such a romantic, Rashmi... What many women set aside, and rarely if ever bring their young girl and her fantasies to life, you do with such deep and stirring emotion. Another gem .. Thank you ..:-)
This is so beautiful that I read it twice....
Last year, in May, I was in the Turkish city of Konya, where Rumi lived most of his life and he was buried. His shrine is beautiful place of pilgrimage. Should you like to see my blog on this pls click http://belita747.multiply.com/tag/turkeykonya
Full of pouring emotion. Wonderful write :)
All I can think of to say is WOW!!!
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We shared a like though, somewhat, this week. But OMGOSH!!! You did it SO much better than I did LOL. This is truly beautiful!
By the way, glad to see you back :-))))!
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Very nice!
This is awesome, great job. Emotional turmoil is often my inspiration for poems too.
LOL! can we ever take away something from anyone, unless they give it away? You are welcome Bryce :).
Thank you Danette...:)
Jackie, writing is the only place romance isnt complicated and I can go as deep as I choose to. ;) Thank you for your kind words and Glad you enjoyed it..
Emotional turmoil is fun when it is on paper....Thank you Kidaci. :)
Thank you lovely folks, for visiting, reading and leaving thought prints.
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