Listening to footsteps beside me
Walking together as we should be
Invisible eyes watch our every move
Through the veil of time and skies above
Window-shopping, we keep our distance
Waiting for darkness, perhaps a chance.
Walking together as we should be
Invisible eyes watch our every move
Through the veil of time and skies above
Window-shopping, we keep our distance
Waiting for darkness, perhaps a chance.
In the Grand Mansion of plenty
Every room ornate yet empty
People with smiles a mile
Food heaped in many a pile
In the room I feel-
Your breath caress my nape,
Every pulse beat through my cape
Every inch of your palm prints
Every wave of your thoughts
Your every gaze bores a hole
Through my fortress, like a mole.
Every room ornate yet empty
People with smiles a mile
Food heaped in many a pile
In the room I feel-
Your breath caress my nape,
Every pulse beat through my cape
Every inch of your palm prints
Every wave of your thoughts
Your every gaze bores a hole
Through my fortress, like a mole.
Darkness hears whispered names,
Moonbeams through the windows lace,
Bares my soul for you to see
In Nakedness, wholly Yours I'll be.
Moonbeams through the windows lace,
Bares my soul for you to see
In Nakedness, wholly Yours I'll be.
Drumbeats subside in the glen
Waking me from slumber's den.
Sighing quietly Over dreams lost
When death put him in the past.
Waking me from slumber's den.
Sighing quietly Over dreams lost
When death put him in the past.
We walk together, like always
Keeping to time's pathways
I wait for darkness, in vain.
To be with you again.
Keeping to time's pathways
I wait for darkness, in vain.
To be with you again.
- Rashmi K P 2006
16 comments:
The imagery in this is just fabulous and it flows smoothly from start to finish!
Wow it just came alive off the page!
@ Danette Thank you for hosting this, its an enjoyable thing to do. Guess you know who liked homework at school ;).
@ Heather, thank you.. glad you enjoyed it :)
I am in awe.
I am speechless.
I am savoring this.
Thank you Laurie. :).
What makes this an exceptional piece of work first is that it is two years old but still reflects upon the now of our lives. Second and foremost, this will become, if you allow it, to be something spoken of in years yet to be for others to ponder and reflect on. Very talented write this is.
Awesome work! Love it!
A wonderful work - has something eternal
Wow, this is a wonderful piece.
good strong images and emotions at work here.
This is so sad, remembering the times spent happily together, and yet, full of hope that in time, you will be together forever...
Very very beautiful poem... how nice image 'Moonbeams through the windows lace'!
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An epic poem with so much to think about and feel. Loved it!
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Oh my, somewhat sad, is there death in this poem...seems to me there is. But regardless love lost?!
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very very nice!
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I really like the way it flows, it is a beautiful poem and I especially like the second stanza... not sure why, could be that the first line draws you in. Thank you!
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