Wednesday, April 4, 2012

Creative Challenge #198-Dormant

With all the dormant guilt

If I had a planet, built

It would be so heavy,

The solar system will need a levee

To stave off, its sinking pull.

 

My spirit wasn’t dead but quiescent

While he thought it deficient

A few years under his thumb

My spirit, felt like pond scum

That stuck under a wandering shoe.

 

There was latent rage

That was difficult to assuage

I stored it all, like white phosphorous

Waiting for ignition, was torturous

Relieved, as fire burned his world to ashes.

 

Tour the CC #198 

12 comments:

dp ♥ said...

oooooh this is so good...it's got me curious where the inspiration came from!

Mindsnomad Yay said...

Thank you :). Dannete :P

Sunny O'Doom said...

I really like that. You can easily see the transition.....nice.

Kitty Konnection Purrrrfect said...

I don't think I would want to be HIM ! lol
potent stuff here...a sizzler

thanks for dropping by

Leveret 333 said...

Whooo hoooo...!!...If I had wondered how she feels, now I have no doubt ...lol
Pure graphics.

Mindsnomad Yay said...

@Sunshine, Thank You, for your Kind comments. I did wonder if it was disjointed sort of not flowing with the emotion.

@LadyCallie, I dont think He would want to be HIM either... LOL!

@Jackie., I like that reaction. It did deliver what I was thinking off. :)

Thank you for your Comments .

Bev P said...

Ooooo like it don't want you as an enemy:)

Leveret 333 said...

The infinite range of relationships and their patterns ...always so intriguing... Only years can give one a wider perception of the myriad of partnerships playing out their dramas with the full intention of getting it right this time...lol
I am gaining a daughter in law this fall... She has been staying with us for several months now. She and my son ignited an old flame from 30 years ago. Thing was, she was in a very toxic situation .. a very unhappy marriage of 28 years. Funny how it all came about .. but then I am so enamored with the way the Universe is orchestrating all these changes and so many are taking the giant leap out of their personal hell and finding another path. This isnt about enemies... It's about honesty and responsibility to something that is obviously toxic. First of the big items on the to-do list is Self Empowerment.... immediate transformation and diffusion of angst. .

belita 747 said...

Excellent!

Nini Recio said...

Oftentimes, suppressed emotions can be a time bomb waiting for a tiny spark to cause a blazing fire...it will be a good idea to release these feelings for health reasons, too.... i enjoyed reading your poem:-)

. . said...

Clearly, you took the steps necessary to take care of yourself ... well done!

Baz H said...

An awesome write;)
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