Tuesday, May 10, 2011

Creative challenge #152 - Repose

I had to try out this format so here I  am. Hope you enjoy it. Thank you Tim(aka Gileson).  I am borrowing your explanation of the format.

Tetracty is a poetic form consisting of at least 5 lines of 1, 2, 3, 4, 10 syllables (total of 20).  Tetractys can be written with more than one verse, but must follow suit with an inverted syllable count.  Tetractys can also be reversed and written 10, 4, 3, 2, 1.   Double Tetractys:  1, 2, 3, 4, 10, 10, 4, 3, 2, 1 Triple Tetractys: 1, 2, 3, 4, 10, 10, 4, 3, 2, 1, 1, 2, 3, 4, 10

Closed
Mine Eyes
Dream in peace
Cozy my heart
As tranquility flows, into our world.

Sleeps a child, cuddly soft, awakening
heavens around,
Bliss is mine
As I
Sleep.

Tour CC #152

12 comments:

Cinabear Cinnamon said...

Ah the rejuvenation of sleep. :)

Virginia ~ said...

Your words are very restful. Well and beautifully written.

Kitty Konnection Purrrrfect said...

There are times when sleep is the only allowed repose....not in my case, though...I am blessed!

beautifully structured and congrats on your attempt for it is worded perfectly!

thanks for visiting

dp ♥ said...

ahhhh this is heavenly ...and you did an awesome job!

belita 747 said...

I like this serenity.... very beautiful!
http://belita747.multiply.com/journal/item/1376/CREATIVE_CHALLENGE_REPOSE

Tim Culey said...

Wonderful in all aspects. Technically perfect .. perfectly written ... a topic near and dear to us all.
Did you find the structure to be difficult, moderately challenging or easy?

Tim Culey said...

Wonderful in all aspects. Technically perfect .. perfectly written ... a topic near and dear to us all.
Did you find the structure to be difficult, moderately challenging or easy?

Mindsnomad Yay said...

Thank you Tim..:) It was moderately challenging, especially since I had to stop my verbose tendency and stick with a limit to deliver meaning.

Mindsnomad Yay said...

Thank you Cinnamon, Virginia, Ladycallie, Danette and Belita. You got the idea of Calm and Restfulness that I wanted to convey.

Tim Culey said...

If you look up "verbose" in your Funk and Wagnals, no doubt my photo is right next to it. It is amazing how much you can say 8 or 10 syllables at a time if you really put your mind to it. Congratulations on a job exceedingly well done!

Lynne M-S said...

Aha! found another format new to me! And great writing within the form. Thank you!

Andrew B said...

Your words and the style really fit together nicely, cool poem.